Thank you!! I'm flattered I was able to succeed past your reservations!
My purpose in writing it like this was to give just a natural sense to what was happening rather than propelling it forward through a plot or real leading factor. They were on vacation, (all of them, not just S/J) so the style itself was rather loose to reflect that, as well.
I also just couldn't resist getting Teal'c to loosen up, because I think that if he ever does it at any point during their years together thus far, that trip would be it!
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Date: 2008-08-01 03:31 pm (UTC)My purpose in writing it like this was to give just a natural sense to what was happening rather than propelling it forward through a plot or real leading factor. They were on vacation, (all of them, not just S/J) so the style itself was rather loose to reflect that, as well.
I also just couldn't resist getting Teal'c to loosen up, because I think that if he ever does it at any point during their years together thus far, that trip would be it!